Ms. Moody,
Kadi said my introductory paragraph was really good. I am glad she thought so. I have always had problems with writing and I hate being forced to write about topics. That’s why this memoir is different. It’s a topic I like and something that happened to me so I am very willing to write about it. I did a good job being descriptive and using different methods to entertain and connect with the reader. This memory is still so fresh in my mind I could write about this all day. I plan on moving back to before the event to describe a bit of the camp and my experiences there. Then follow through with reflection on the camp and my overcoming my fear when we went spelunking. This experience had a big impact on my life and I grew up so much as a result. I learned to not let fear hold me back from all the exciting things the world has out there to offer. I love being descriptive in my writing cause I know as a reader how much more enjoyable reading is when the picture is painted for you with words. I also like to use intricate words. They fit in better with the writing sometimes and make the story different from all the other more commonly used words in most stories. I can easily recall dialogue from my experiences so that will definitely help hold the readers interest. I also have a scrapbook thing from that camp which I will see if I can go over that to help me recollect and reminisce about my experiences.
I’m having an easy time writing about this memoir and I enjoy this type of writing. I think I am learning to use the different methods of writing in a much better way than I was before. I am encouraged by what Kadi had to say. It would be awesome if I get really good at writing. I hope to impress you with my final draft.

Thanks for your time.
Brendan Rhoney